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Word Count vs. Page count, how does it symbolize our transition in writing, Highshcool-College(Sunday something)

As I sit here on this dreadful Sunday, trying to recuperate my energy to resume editing as well as revising my argument pieces, I think about my past major essay writing assignments in school.  What I think mainly about, is the way our teachers would make our guidelines for our paper.  Always, at the bottom of the assignment sheet in bold would be the amount of pages it had to be.  In college, it is no longer about the amount of pages, but about the amount of words.  Although this is a small change, since in high school our teachers would mark a specific font as well as amount of line spacing, it symbolizes the change in I've experienced in writing from high school to college.  Both page count and word count are both quantities, however, page count in my mind has made me just want to write random gibberish and hit the amount of pages we are supposed to have.  While word count is makes me think that I only have this many words to get my situation as well as view across the readers mind clearly.  Word count worries me based on the fact that I have too much to say in my writing now, from being able to clearly connect different ideas to my main argument, while page count in the past has caused me anxiety for not making my writing long enough,(complete change in my writing “persona” symbolized by teacher/professor assignment guidelines).  

This picture symbolizes growth, which occurs through all of our educational experiences at college in all subjects.  Maturing in writing is needed not only in all types of curriculum, but also in life.  

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Extra Credit: Pineapple Publishing Inc.

(see separate post for the video)

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this is the best video by far no bias

Extra Credit: Pineapple Publishing Inc.

(See other post for the advertisement & the letter to the author)

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The Unveiling of a writer

JOB ADD:

Here at Dunder Mifflin CO. we are looking for a writer who takes his time when writing a piece, as well as does not make an outline before starting to write a piece, as well as does not think about how complex the piece sounds while writing, only cares about the information and connections in the piece rather than the complexity the word sounds.  

Taking my time when writing a piece really defines me as a writer throughout my lifetime experience with writing.  When I first started to write pieces in grade school-middleschool, I would frantically start writing my first idea about the argument I was presented with, without taking time to comprehend the material, as well as the argument.  This is one of the first things I learned when becoming an enlightened writer.  Good ideas take time to create, and good ideas only come from the amount of understood material in context, so taking time when reading over the assigned reading or material to understand an argument is very important when it comes to my writing.  However, I will still struggle with writing an outline before writing an essay.  I have never liked planning before doing I task, I usually rush head on without thinking, in my writing as well as in most things in my life.  This is majority a con since I don't think about what I'm doing before I'm actually doing it.  Writing in college my first year however, I noticed that with assignments that aren’t huge weighted essays, if you read all of the information and just take time to mull it over, as well as what the argument is and your idea to contribute towards one side of the argument, you don't need to write an outline for the assignment.  I think one of the biggest kind of “main ideas” that I am learning throughout my writing at school here, is that taking time to think of all the information you have been presented with, and not start writing once the first idea comes into your head, and waiting till your satisfied with the idea you have come up with, is the way an excellent writing piece is created.  Also, another sub main idea would be to always find ways to connect your information with past experiences and more specifically, information already learned, because the more connections you make in your piece, the more variety it has, which in my opinion, makes excellent writing.  

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Sunday something

Reflecting on this writing class, as our quarter comes to a close, I look back on how much my writing has evolved from the beginning of the quarter to this moment, since most of our recent writing assignments have been about redefining our theory of writing as well as just thinking about how our writing has changed since the beginning of the quarter.  This Sunday I reflect not only on my writing in this class, but also how this class has changed my writing forever in other my other classes.  Just from learning basic components of writing that when mastered, and used correctly, can make ones piece that much better.  

This is a picture of my period of writing enlightenment that has occurred at various points throughout the quarter

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Part 1 attendance

Me and Peter’s first picture starts in the lobby of the library at a poster that says let’s talk.  This reminded me of discourse because obviously the definition of discourse is written or spoken communication or debate.  Discourse is one of the most crucial components in writing because it pretty much is the action of the rhetorical situation being used.  Our second picture was outside of the library, in front of the sign that says Anderson academic commons in Bold and under it are a bunch of departments and centers that are inside of the library.  This sign reminded me of the key term of genres because on this sign, as well as in my writing, I write about a main genre, and in the sign the main genre is Anderson Academic Writing, while the sub genres are all of the departments in the building.  Similarly to how we have been taught in our writing to have one main genre, but be able to make connections with this main genre with its sub genres, as well as be able to make connections in other genres, but overall, always connecting everything back to the main genre.  Our third picture, was at the sculpture that is right in front of the library, when you are approaching it.  I chose to have a picture of this sculpture to remind myself as well as my classmates that writing is art, it takes multiple elements (key words in writing) as well as years of practice to master the craft, exactly like an artistic craft.  My map 1 and my second map are quite similar because they contain most of the same key words that define my “theory of writing” as well as good writing in my mind.  A major difference between i’d say the experience from my 1st map and 2nd map since there was no major difference in my actual map, was that this time in trying to find key terms on campus, it wasn't me needing to find the key terms within the settings of the campus, it was me finding places that I could use my understanding of the key terms.  In my mind, my second experience with the map makes me a lot more confident with my thinking of how good I know what the meaning of good writing is.  

me and Peter used same photos cause we were together so they are on his post.  

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part 2 attendance

Reflecting on what I had written in our 1st theory of writing Tumblr post, I agree with everything I have written, and still believe that all of it applies to my “theory of writing” My big idea was that writing had to be as wide as it had to be specific.  We have been learning repetitively throughout each key term that we learn for writing to write in one genre but have examples within multiple sub genres of that genre.  As well as, throughout each writing assignment we do, we are urged to connect our main idea in our writing piece with multiple other things that vaguely connect to our main idea, yet we are able to explain it so concisely that the connection is understood, as well helps our argued point of view on the rhetorical situation at hand.  I would say that my theory of writing has stayed the same, yet in reading as well as writing about new topics, I would put more emphasis on certain key terms that we have learned that make up great writing.  For instance, I would say in my theory of writing that audience has a huge impact on the way your piece sounds as well as is viewed by your readers.  Each different writing I have done has always had a specific audience, and I have known that, however I did not know how important it was to the success of my writing as well as I did not pay close enough attention to it while writing.  Audience creates the tone as well as the type of person you want to read your piece.  In my mind as a writer, it is one of the most crucial components of writing since it pretty much decides who will want to read your piece, as well as keep reading once they have felt the tone of the piece.  Recently, I had to write a business plan for my gateway to business class, and noticed that I always kept in the back of my head the “audience” that would be reading the plan, thus making my tone stay the exact same throughout my piece of writing, as well as keeping the tone sounding professional and of “high class”

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Educational moments

My first moment, is earlier on towards the beginning of the year, when we first started learning about rhetoric.  Im going to be honest, the first week or two even that we learned about rhetoric I barely knew what it was and had no almost no idea how to use it in my writing, whether that had been in my Tumblr post writing/in class writing or in my business classes(G2B had to write one paper as well as in info I had to write a few quizzes).  In one of my first posts, I chose this quote as an example of rhetoric, ““if someone says, that is a dangerous situation..” (page 1, Blitzer).  I stated that this was a simple explanation of rhetoric, and although I can see how it could apply to the rhetorical situation, its mainly just a description of an action.  The article that got me to understand the rhetorical situation, was the MLK Birmingham letter.  Using the situation of the civil rights movement, specifically letters that MLK had wrote to help his situation, really helped me grasp the concept of the rhetorical situation.  After this reading, I started thinking more about the rhetorical situation in my other classes as well as in my daily life, deciphering situations and arguments using rhetoric.  

my second moment, looking through my old posts, I am reflecting on the fact when I believe that I first was introduced to the concept of audience in writing.  Obviously, I had some intellect on what audience was and how I used it in my writing before discussing in class.  However, I didn’t know there was a term for the people who would read my writing, as well as how it is very detrimental to have a good understanding of it in my writing.  Although the Big Picture People tumbler post was mainly to teach us about genre, this is the first instance were I noticed the idea of audience being used.  We had to write about a car crash that we were in to our grandma, professor, as well as a text message to a close friend.  The audience in each instance would be who we are writing too.  I know that this is a simple example, but I wanted to go back on it because for this assignment I have been looking over my past tumbler posts, and noticed that this is the first time I saw the most basic example of audience in writing.  Simple  examples like this better help me understand all the key components of writing.  In writing my business plan for my G2B class, I had to always keep in my mind that the audience wasn't my teacher, it is an investor in my company.  Thinking of the audience in this way, I have to make sure my writing sounds professional as well as explain any business terms I may use since the person reading will not know these terms.  

my most recent moment of writing “realization” is using revision.  Throughout high school, I would kind of spit all of my words out onto the page and rush through the process of writing out a paper.  Revision for me until this class, was mainly done for editing and making sure my writing sounded they way I wanted it to.  I have learned, that Revision, in Sommers words, is asking, ““major theoretical questions of my ideas, responding to those questions, and thinking of proportion and structure…”(Sommers pg.384).  Revision needs to not only be done at the end of writing for grammatical errors and tweaking the paper, it also needs to be done throughout the entire process of writing, even in the beginning .  Sommers describes revision to be asking questions about ones ideas and responding to them.  I have written papers many times, and once an idea has popped into my head I immediately start writing, and I stop questioning my idea  and lose my curiosity of the idea and usually write a bunch of crap.  I have learned that the act of revision needs to be done from beginning to end of the writing process, to establish more complex ideas that are explained thoroughly and clearly.  The end part of revision, is not just grammar and technicalities, we have learned in class that the end part of revision most incorporate checking for all the key components of writing we have learned about (genre, tone, audience, rhetorical situation, pathos, logos, ethos) and making sure that they are being used correctly in the situation I am writing about.  

This picture perfectly sums my new feeling on revision, in that it is a constant process, that I need to think about throughout the entire writing process, which is why bart has written it so many times in this photo(revise all the time!). 

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Murder In the world of Rhetoric

At 7a.m I arrived at the crime scene which was swarming with pigs.  They had all of their little accessories out(yellow tape, doughnuts).  The parking garage was infested with officials.  Mark Smith had been stabbed on the third floor of the garage, and there was a trail of blood from his blue Volkswagen to the exit stairwell where his body laid.  He had been stabbed three times, once in the back, once in the abdomen, and once right between his pecs.  I asked one of the officers if Mr. Smith had anything in his pockets, the cop replied no, only his wallet which contained a small packet containing a powdery white substance.  I looked around the scene for the evidence container, and discreetly dipped my index finger in the packet, pressed my index finger around my gums, and preceded to feel the rapid sensation one gets from the high of pure cocaine.  I have a thought that Mr. Swift got scammed in a bad drug deal with a bad drug dealer.  

The body was brought to my place of work at around 2:00 am.  There were fresh stab wounds all around his chest and lower abdomen area.  I did the usually inspections on the body, height was 5′10 and he weighed 182 pounds.  Physically, he looked very fit, with broad shoulders as well as a stocky chest.  His face was very rugged since he had a few scratches in it, most likely from hitting the pavement once he was attacked.  He had a thick, almost overwhelming beard that looked like it had not been washed in a few days to say the least.  

Mark Smith was a loved man by the community who loved to spend time helping those less fortunate, as well as children.  Mr. Smith would spend most of his weekend helping out at the local soup kitchen in his community, cooking with various meals, although, we know from his wife that he never cooked at home.  Mr. Smith also volunteered at the local public schools, and did whatever kind of jobs they needed, whether it was a boring task or excruciating, Mr. Smith was willing to do it, that’s just the kind of guy he was.  He will be missed, and will be remembered by all the good memories he made with each and everyone of you, as well as being an outstanding member in the community.  

Ladies and Gentleman of the jury, Mark Smith was violently stabbed at a local parking garage on June 6th at 10:37 pm.  The security cameras are broken on this floor, so we do not have physical evidence of what happened.  Police did find cocaine on Mr. Smiths wallet.  Although Mr. Smith as seen by many was not the friendliest as well as honorable of persons, but did he really deserve being viciously murdered, the answer is no.  I think most sane people of society can agree that in no way is stabbing someone an appropriate action unless the person is being attacked.  That murderer, over there, deserves to be locked behind bars and serve his crime against humanity. 

1. I found the first exercise to be easier to write because I imagined that I was a detective writing in my notebook, so I didn't have to worry about my audience or proper wording, it was more private.  

2.  I found the exercise for writing to the jury to be the hardest because in this argument, I have to think about my audience, as well as the scenery that I am.  Since this would be read allowed to a court, I needed to make sure more wording was professional.  As well as I needed to make sure that my writing would appeal to the emotion as well as the logic of the audience (ethos, pathos, logos) since in this situation, I am trying to convince the jury of finding the criminal guilty of the murder.  

3.  the rhetorical situation in academic writing demands that both sides of the situation are clearly defined as well as clear reasons are stated why one side is not correct and the other one is.  The audience for these situations are all different, which causes the tone of each piece of my writing to be different as well, since their is a different type of persons listening or reading each excerpt.  I think that information from all of the different excerpts an be included in an academic paper, I would just need to change the tone to fit my academic paper and the audience I would be writing for.  

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peer review draft #2

Argument 2: Draft 1

.    1)  What is writer’s argument? How do you know? 


the argument is that it is hard to correctly translate haut couture into clothing.  I know this because throughout the column, she was being interviewed about haut couture items and how they are not accessible to most of the public.    

.    2)  How does writer establish ethos, pathos, and logos? 


The writer establishes pathos by separating the two columns with very different tones.  Based on the definition of haut couture, the writer is establishing logos/ that only the top 1% receive and wear haut couture clothing items.  The writer establishes ethos by having the interviewer state that her line of clothing had incorporated designs and ideas from other designers.  

.    3)  How does writer show audience awareness? Be specific

The writer shows audience awareness by writing with complex terms about fashion that only high fashion critiques and hobbyists can understand.  


.    4)  How does writer fulfill genre conventions? Be specific

high end fashion only.  


.    5)  What 2 things to work on in revision? 


she needs to work on her perspective(she shouldn’t be interviewing herself), as well as establish ethos more frequently.

.    6)  What 2 things working well? 


her audience awareness went really well in my opinion and the definitiveness of her pathos by changing her tone between each column.

 Argument 1: Draft 2

The argument is that a person wearing a haute couture fashion item essentially becomes the item.  

2. Ethos is established by having a quote about fashion bloggers.  Pathos not really established since her tone is mainly the same for throughout the entire website.  Logos is established through her showing different types of designs and the explanation of the different designs.  

3. the writer shows audience awareness by having pictures of the designs, however, I think it is too complex wording for pre teenager age.

4. High fashion only.

5. need to make language more friendly to 11-14 year olds as well as make the website as a whole more user friendly to the audience.

6. the website looks really good and I like the way she’s using her examples of designs.

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First-Year Writing and Learning

transferring of knowledge is very important in all types of situations throughout life is important.  Not only for the experiences that end up being good but also for the experiences that are bad.  In my opinion you don't really transfer knowledge from past experiences or situations unless you learn from them.  In experience most of the past experiences that I've only had to learn from have been experiences where I have fucked up and had to retry thus learning the material once over again.  Newborn college students , it states in the text, “In part, this view seems to arise from students’ quite correct understanding of the rhetorical situation of “school writing,” In my experience, I did not understand the rhetorical situation of school writing throughout high school, and it even took me a few weeks of our writing class to actually understand the situation as well as be able to know the different sides of the situation and be able to defend or talk about either side of the situation.  

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Sunday Something

https://thoughtcatalog.com/cody-delistraty/2014/03/the-neurological-similarities-between-successful-writers-and-the-mentally-ill/

in my Sunday something, I searched up on google what it takes to be a good writer, and although most of what came up in the google search list was bullshit like quizzes or like “top 10 tips” on becoming a great writer.  However, one article that I found, called the, “The Neurological Similarities Between Successful Writers And The Mentally Ill” really intrigued me.  We have been learning different concepts that make up great writing, and a lot of us in class state that going back on our past experiences in life and reflecting on them and connecting them to our writing is what a good writer does when thinking as well as creating ideas.  In the article, Andreas Fink, a biology professor at the University of Graz in Austria found a relationship in the ability to come up with an idea and the inability to suppress ones precuneus which is the part of the brain where one ruminates and ponders ones own past experiences.  Solidifying the idea that good ideas come from reminiscing past experiences creating new ideologies about those past experiences.  

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revision

revision is the key to making sure your paper maintains its strong topic as well as keeps the writing aimed towards its specific target audience.  I thought revision before this college writing class was mainly meant for solving errors/editing.  The problem of editing instead of revision in my opinion is a big problem with novice writers/writers before they mature which in my personal example would be me in writing from learning for the first time as a little kid to graduating high school.  Editing is not revision and we tend to lean more towards this process of revision because it takes less knowledge about writing to do as well as shorter amount of time.  When editing is used as revising, almost none to very little of the key components of writing are used to question your own piece of writing, which leaves out all the factors that make up a good writing piece.  Sommers writes that revising, “means taking apart what I have written and putting it back together again” (Sommers pg. 384).  In my opinion this quote represents the fatal doing of writers doing editing as the revision process.  When I have said I was revising my paper throughout high school, it would mainly be me going through my paper and looking for grammatical errors  and quick fix-ups that didn’t add any new purpose or meaning to my paper.      Correct revision, in my opinion, through Sommers words, is asking, “major theoretical questions of my ideas, responding to those questions, and thinking of proportion and structure...”(Sommers pg.384).  Revision is the process of thinking about all of your specific writing components that make ones writing great(Your Genre, Your Audience, Your rhetorical Situation, Your topic, E.T.C.) and questioning each component seeing if you have conveyed it accurately based on the type of paper that you are trying to create.  Revision is a key part in me writing because for me, sometimes I start writing my idea, and I get so entranced in my idea that I completely forget about other components of my writing that need to be included (EX: genre and audience big time!).  

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Theory of writing

my theory of writing is that it needs to be as wide variety as it needs to have specific examples.  I have also learned within the category of “wideness” that a good idea doesn’t come quickly, it takes a while to kind of prosper and flourish. I learned this idea of taking your time when creating a main idea for writing or just creating ideas in general from the video of where good ideas come from (the turtle) as well as in Johnson's introduction.   When Darwin is standing on the beach and watching the waves crash against the coral, he writes in his journal, “I can hardly explain the reason, but there is to my mind much grandeur in the view of the outer shores of these lagoon islands” (page 7 Johnson).  Darwin using the word grandeur reminds me of my main conception that great writing needs to have such a far out range of topics, but also have a specific style to it that makes it eye catching.  This style though in my opinion has to be thought of before made because it has to fit with your specific audience.  In the Russel and Yanez reading, we learned the importance of the audience in ones writing as well as the idea of a genre.  Russel and Yanez use singing as the same thing as writing, AND use genre in their example, “And each activity system of singing has its own genres, its own expectations and norms and rules, its own culture and historical traditions” (page 5).  Russel and Yanez in this quote are saying that each piece of writing must have its own genre, which contains its own set of rules which one of the main rules would have to be tainting the correct tone to your audience in the writing.  

2. Dr. Seuss

Don't give up

believe in your writing 

no matter how much style and speed you type while smiling.  

as well as take it slow 

like a gentle tortoise 

to create your good ideas 

at an pace of ease and noiselessness. 

Be considerate of genre 

and don't deal with none connections 

or else you will be without a mention.  

repesct your audience

and your audience will respect you. 

3. my main theory about writing is that all of your ideas should be very different but connect to an overall “bridge” idea.  

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Entrenchment

We have recently been learning in class that reflective rhetorical analysis that we learned about mainly last week is critical to writing.  Rhetorical analysis after reading the text is important to the greatness level of the outcome of your paper.  If a writer does not think about the questions they can ask about the information, before they start to write about the information, they will go to their first choice easiest idea and write about it.  A good paper takes time to not only write but create, which is where the rhetorical analysis of the information either  of what you have just read about becomes essential.  Similar to the video where good ideas come from, good pieces of writing take time to develop, like the slow tortoise example in the video.  However, a lot faster then that example but the same concept of taking your time and really thinking about all your information as a whole, then making your claim or idea that your basing your paper about.  Thinking about the situation(rhetorical obviously) that you want to convey based on the information you read about gives your paper a wider genre and a more none descriptive topic which allows for the paper to be more diverse with different types of examples and information being taken from multiple sources within the genre and connecting them via the topic.  

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Sunday something

This is how I feel about writing from high school to how I write now.  In the “old way” I was told a distinct way on how to write, and there was not a lot of leeway or I didn't know how to at the time, of writing a paper that had one main genre but that I could connect to multiple other genres.  I never knew how to switch the genres when I was writing about one topic, I would always stick to one genre and my main topic.  I feel like my high school writing, I wasn't aware of how important the rhetorical situation was, which is why I wasn't able to write using multiple genres because I didn't understand the situation I was writing about as well as I needed too.