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Write a piece about someone who dies multiple times

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the author's barely disguised longing for a kinder world

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why did I spend two and a half hours making cakes just for other people to eat on my birthday?

because there's the slightest chance of a manager bringing in another cake and I'll be damned if I'm going to let a generic grocery store cake dominate the table on my day. good luck enjoying that junk when there's delicious chocolate miracle whip cake over here.

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personally I've always wanted something about the beginning of the First Age of Flight - the first skyships! the founding of Sanctaphrax! the adventures of Kobold the Wise! - but I also want a book about Twig Quarter getting into historical reenactment and running his own First Age skyship

if the edge chronicles did have another saga i'd either want a) the extended unhinged adventures of keris before she got torn apart by wolves b) whatever was going through thadeus quarter's mind when he was revolutionising phraxships or c) the hijinks of wind jackal and linius pallitax as kids

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do you like EVIL ACADEMIA? do you like being EXILED TO THE SEWERS? do you like THE TORMENTS OF IMMORTALITY? do you like SUFFICIENTLY ADVANCED SCIENCE being INDISTINGUISHABLE FROM MAGIC? do you like HORRIFIC ACTS OF VIOLENCE? do you like SCATHING CRITIQUES OF CAPITALISM? do you like HAUNTING DEPICTIONS OF AMNESIA? do you like INSANE LIGHTNING CULTS? then read the edge chronicles

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This wouldn't happen to me if i were a huge dragon

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Trick or treat :)

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Trick-or-treat!

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trick or treeeaaat

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I suppose if anyone sends me a trick-or-treat I'll post a random piece of old art

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Reblog if its ok to spam you with boops

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rb this and tag your favourite soundtracks! they can be anything like games or movies or shows or whatever i wanna know what the best ones are 👀

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I feel like the three of these can be rolled together somewhat. How do you give dialogue emotion, have characters move without being stiff, and show depth and feeling in narration? By treating all three as the same problem. You want your writing to have flow and feeling, so you intermix the dialogue, the action, and the emotion.

Let's take an alternate look at your final example.

Amy's feet thump down the stairs as her stomach grumbles. She goes through the motions of preparing a plain bowl of cereal but then pauses, blinking into the fridge, taking five whole seconds to realize the milk is gone.

A crunch sounds from behind her, and she turns to look at her brother, who sits at the table with a bowl full of her cereal - and the milk carton. Swiftly she crosses the kitchen and snatches the carton, but it's near-weightless in her hand.

"Too slow," her brother mumbles past a mouthful of what should have been her breakfast. She bonks the carton against his head.

So what do we see here? Amy thumps down the stairs, hungry for breakfast. Does she get grumpy when she's hungry? The rest of the scene seems to support this. She's also tired - she prepares a bowl of plain cereal, the lowest-effort food she can manage, and she doesn't even notice immediately that the milk is gone. She doesn't care what's for breakfast as long as she can feed herself now. You see also that we skip the details of preparing a bowl of cereal. We all know how it goes, and making Amy seem too tired to care is a much better way of conveying the tedious familiarity of the act than describing its every motion.

The crunch, a comedic beat or a reminder of an unexpected situation? Amy expects there to be enough milk for her breakfast, suggesting her brother's presence wasn't planned for. He's a cherry of irritation on top of a bad morning sundae. Worse still, he has to rub it in with a taunt - referencing a habit of late mornings, perhaps, or a habit of lateness in general? Even just a tiny bit of dialogue can affect the pace of a scene, and reveal character in its delivery. It's an old taunt between siblings, and she responds in kind with a bonk on his head. A harmless bonk, since the milk carton's emptiness has been established with its lack of weight.

Does this help? Do you see how it's not only in what the characters do, but in how they do it? Not merely their actions, but their language and body language, the back-and-forth between them.

You also want to learn to vary your sentences. In each of the examples you give, I notice that almost every sentence plays out the same way. Read your paragraphs aloud, and try to notice when too many sentence are starting with a character name or a pronoun. Change it up a bit. Don't be afraid to sprinkle more adverbs in there, critics be damned, just as long as they don't fill up your sentences.

And read more. Study how the writers you like form their sentences and imbue them with feeling. Study how dialogue and action can be intertwined, or how one can be excluded for simplicity or emphasis.

And above all, don't stop writing. You'll improve with practice and time.

Dear fellow Writers, I have a few writing questions?

When it comes to dialogue, how do I write it in a way to show emotion, Drives the plot, or give information to the reader?

2.  Most of my stories, I prefer to write from a narrator's perspective, but I don’t know how to give characters depth or an inside look at how they feel or mentally and emotionally react to something.

here is an example I think show good narration:

Hunter adjusts his seatbelt, gripping the steering wheel, trying to navigate through airport traffic.

He looks over to Savannah who is leaning her head against the wall, listening to the music playing on the radio softly in the background, trying to forget that her world has changed completely. 

He opens his mouth to talk to her, and say anything that can help, but nothing comes out. So instead, he tries to focus on getting home and preparing himself to talk with the detectives.

3.How do I move my characters of give them actions without it sounding like I am just giving the directions?

For examples, I feel like I write like this.

Sally and Mark are standing outside in the rain. They are arguing about why he has not asked her to be his date to prom. She pushes him to get away and turns to run away, He follows behind her to continue the conversation and grabs a hold of her hand. She looks at him, he looks at her. 

EX2:

Amy walked downstairs to the kitchen to get something to eat for breakfast. She goes to the cabinet to get a bowl, then walks to the pantry to get cereal. She then goes to the fridge to get milk, but there is none. Turning around she notices, her brother sitting at the the table, with an empty carton of milk next to him and a full bowl of cereal in front of him

I feel like it sounds like character A moves here and then character B does this and moves this way and Character A then looks at B like this and then B looks at A like that. 

If you can answer at least one question that would be of great help.

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The changing seasons.

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at least there's always the Character

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okay but what if we can hear the sun and that's why nighttime is so quiet