#like it was bothering me structurally that the first 3 ch are one scene and then ch4 was like... 11
Explore tagged Tumblr posts
Text
exhausted and torn between wanting to just watch somethin or play the sims, and actually wanting to write....
#gonna start ch4 of UR over#wasnt vibin and i think i have a better idea for it#and i think it should make it a tiny bit shorter too#like it was bothering me structurally that the first 3 ch are one scene and then ch4 was like... 11#but it also has to be a long chapter#so i can only cut so much#but if i can drop it to like 9 scenes ill be happy
0 notes
Note
one more ahaha but the cherry blossom scene at the end of catch up game ch 3 because i'm still thinking nonstop about it all the time đđđ
ABSOLUTELY I CAN also for anyone reading this go look at Mikaâs art which inspired this scene. Itâs the tumblr version so you can reblog it too, which you should do, even if you donât read my long rambling,
okay once again rambling below...
Traditionally, Larry Butz arrived at any social gathering anywhere from half an hour to three hours later than the time he was told, so all things considered, he was actually early. Phoenix wasted no time informing him of the latest betrayal among their small elementary school friend group.
this is a direct callout to one of my friends from high school, where we started seriously considering telling her that any social event we were planning started an hour earlier than it actually did so that sheâd make it there on time. We never did in case this turned out to be the time she actually made it on time, but still.
âLarry, remember that one time we were trying to make that gigantic hopscotch game, and we ran out of chalk?â He pointed an accusatory finger at Edgeworth, who sighed. âIt turns out, Edgeworth hid it all along!â
Larry blinked, then shrugged. âOh yeah, right, that. Well, I kind of had an ideaâŚâ
âWh â You hid this from me too?! D-Death! The death penalty for the both of you!â
âWhy does this all sound so familiar,â Edgeworth commented under his breath.
I think this part is mostly there so Larry actually does something because I couldnât find any real way to fit him into this fic...? Anyways the dialogue there with Phoenix threatening the death penalty on Miles and Larry is pretty much directly lifted from the end of Turnabout Goodbyes, which is why Miles comments on it sounding familiar.Â
They continued on in that vein for some time, dredging up old elementary school memories. Phoenix proclaimed to be the only innocent member of that group, before Edgeworth brought up a set of very nice gel pens Phoenix reportedly stole from him. Phoenix and Edgeworth got caught up in their argument, and barely even noticed when Larry wandered away, joining Maggey and Gumshoe at the fishing pond while Franziska critiqued them.
This sort of familiar banter was normal. As Edgeworth teased in that same way he had ever since Phoenix first faced him in court, he had to wonder if heâd just imagined the way Edgeworth had been looking at him during the party. Maybe everything was fine, after all.
Not pictured: Phoenix and Miles leaning in closer to each other as they argue. too close. Larry tries to comment but neither of them hear him. Eventually he just walks away because heâs sick of third-wheeling with these two. Itâs my firm belief that if there werenât the court benches in the way that they need to slam, these two would slowly walk closer and closer to each other as they argue because they. uh. want to âintimidateâ each other. thatâs why theyâre nose to nose like that. the whole courtroom is suddenly very uncomfortable.
Haha anyways also I think these two would pick the dumbest things to argue about all the time? Never seriously arguing, the just like bickering because they donât know how to hold conversations about their feelings.
âYou still havenât explained exactly what happened to my gel pen set,â Edgeworth accused, as they circled around the argument for the third time.
Phoenix threw his hands up in the air. âI just forgot to return it! I didnât know you were so bothered by it. You should have brought it up!â
âBack then? You were so sensitive. If I brought up that you might have upset me in the least, you would have burst into tears.â
âI wasnât that sensitive.â
Edgeworth sighed. âWright, you cried when I got a question wrong on a spelling test, because you thought I would be sad about it.â
âAnd you were!â Phoenix retorted. âYou cried for like an hour!â
âBecause when you started crying, I thought it was something I had to be ashamed of!â
More bickering, pretty much! Also I do think Phoenix cried A Lot and was super sensitive up until the whole Dahlia trial which traumatized him pretty badly...Â
Anyways the REAL story behind this incident which I am making up just now is probably that Miles was on the verge of crying because of Getting Something Wrong -- which I totally get, I absolutely almost cried over spelling tests as a baby -- and Phoenix picked up on this and realized his best friend was sad and started crying, which made Miles start to fully cry, and it just became a mess.
Meanwhile Larry with the 3/10 on his spelling test was just like âI donât get what you guys are so upset about a 9/10 is greatâ which just makes them cry even more.
(Then Gregory probably found out about this incident and sat Miles down and gave him a speech about âeveryone makes mistakes and itâs okay to not be perfect all the time, this is a learning opportunity and it shows you what you need to work on!â
:)
That sentiment didnât last very long.)
Wow Iâm getting off topic, moving on --
Phoenix crossed his arms. âI remember this whole thing very differently than you do. You cried first.â
âI never cried in fourth grade.â
Phoenix leaned in and whispered into his ear, âOrigami.â
âDo not bring that up!â Edgeworth hissed as Phoenix reared back, laughing.
I donât know if you need to lean in super close and whisper that in his ear though Phoenix, that might be a bit unnecessary. Miles got lucky here in that his Eternal Shame over not being able to fold an origami crane in fourth grade overrode whatever reaction he undoubtedly would have had about Phoenixâs face being very close to his face.
Anyways this banter is here in the fic mostly because I really wanted to show them being all comfortable and happy with each other. That was a major thing I wanted to push as much as possible in these earlier chapters, that they do care about each other a lot even before we enter the more outright romantic territory.
âRegardless, I am certain you took my gel pen set, so donât try to blame faulty memory on that one. I bet you carelessly used them all up, didnât you?â
âHardly! I wouldnât even touch it after you left. It reminded me of you.â
Some of the fight left Edgeworthâs stance. âReally?â
âWell⌠yeah.â He wasnât sure why the admission suddenly felt like a confession of an entirely different sort.
aw man Phoenix you brought feelings into your banter NOW what are you going to do.
Iâm preeetty sure I have books that I lent to my friends in fourth grade that they never gave back so itâs of course not an inherently romantic thing, they probably just forgot it was mine and obviously arenât going to bring it back now ten years later, but for Phoenix in this case it was probably more like âI borrowed these gel pens from Miles and then keep forgetting to give them back but was going to after winter break, and then he left, so I need to hold onto them until he comes backâ. Miles was taken from his life so suddenly it probably had a huge effect on him, especially since he had few friends at the time and Miles made such a big impact on him.
The two of them sat underneath the tree in a sudden, serene quiet. Theyâd both discarded their suit jackets at some point, down to their dress shirts and waistcoats. Phoenix pretended not to notice the way Edgeworthâs eyes darted across the line of his shoulders and lingered longer than they should have.
I donât ever really pay much attention to what people are wearing or what they look like at any particular time when Iâm writing, but in this case I took extra care to make sure they were in the same outfits as in the art that inspired this!
Maybe Iâll ramble a bit more about that! Pretty much the âthemeâ of narumitsu week this year was âcherry blossomsâ, so I wanted to find some way to incorporate them into this fic somewhere somehow. I decided to have that as a focus on Free Day because I enjoy having structure and wasnât sure what to have for the day.
Some of this scene, mainly the picnic, is inspired by that one official art here. The first iteration of this chapter had everyone in it (with the obvious exceptions of Diego and Mia) but then I took out Maya and Pearl for reasons I explained when I was talking about the scene in chapter 6 where I decided to cut a lot of Mayaâs scenes out of this fic... even though I love her a lot.
And of course when I thought about cherry blossoms and narumitsu I thought about Mikaâs art, yes I am linking it again, which I believe she posted about a month or so before I started planning and I was Thinking About It Constantly. Itâs gorgeous and since there was the perfect opportunity to use it here I just couldnât resist and here we are.
Back to the paragraph: Miles attempted to subtly check Phoenix out. It was not subtle.
âDo you still have those gel pens?â Edgeworth asked, softer. âI think you owe me them, after everything.â
âOh, shut up,â said Phoenix, but it was difficult to have a heated argument right now, for some unknown reason. âIf I still have them, theyâre in a box somewhere. Plus, they ought to have dried up by now.â
âI doubt it.â A faint smile was beginning to crawl on Edgeworthâs face. âThose gel pens were state of the art.â
âSure they were,â Phoenix dismissed. âAnd, what, youâre going to use them? Sign your fancy prosecutor documents in bright pink?â
âWhat makes you think I donât do that already?â
âYou wouldnât â oh, wait, of course youâd have customized ink in the same colour as your entire wardrobe, who am I even talking toâŚâ
âMhm.â Edgeworth brushed his bangs from his eyes, a motion that Phoenixâs brain decided to fixate on for some reason. âBut really, you went to all the trouble of keeping the set, and you never used any of them?â
(Miles voice)Â âoh so you kept something as trivial as that for so long because they reminded you of me? Tell me more. Why do you want a reminder of me. What exactly do you think of me, Wright,â
hm pretty much as soon as Phoenix brought Feelings into this conversation the atmosphere kind of changed and you can now imagine Miles staring with the most adoring expression at Phoenix while Phoenix is ignoring this with such intensity that it doesnât even show up in his narration. But he also watches the way Miles brushes his bangs from his eyes, so heâs not much better.
And thinking about it now this scene really went on for too long about gel pens hahaha...Â
âObjection!â Phoenix declared. âI used the blue one to write you letters at first.â
âAh, of course you did. I never got any of those⌠How many did you send?â
âI donât even want to knowâŚâ
Edgeworth hummed and looked off into the distance, where Gumshoe was demonstrating how to cast a line. âYour level of dedication is something else,â he said, as if to himself.
âWell, yeah. You were my only non-Larry friend. You wereâŚâ Phoenix swallowed. âYou were important to me, you know? You saved me.â
âYou keep bringing that up. Youâve more than returned the favor, you know that, donât you?â
âIâm inclined to disagree.â
I donât have a consistent headcanon about whether Miles got or read the letters, in this fic presumably von Karma intercepted them and got rid of them... and then presumably Miles ignored any that were sent to him as an adult.
Also these two are going to have ridiculous arguments about who saved who until theyâre on their deathbeds, Iâm sure.
Edgeworth turned back towards him as if to retort, but stopped halfway, his eyes widening slightly as he stared at Phoenix.
â... Something on my face?â Phoenix asked, trying to quell the feeling of some sort of anxiety that bubbled up when Edgeworth stared at him like that.
insert mikacherryblossomart.png
Miles turns away for one second and then suddenly oh no heâs even more gorgeous now
Edgeworth was silent for some time. Then, very softly, he said, âYou have cherry blossom petals in your hair.â
âWhat? Do I?â He reached a hand up to brush them out, but Edgeworth stopped him by grabbing his wrist, freezing Phoenix.
âWith your hair, youâll never get them out like that.â With his spare hand, Edgeworth began to pick each individual petal from his hair. âYou look so â silly, Wright.â
Partially a callback to the beginning of chapter 3, when they were kids:
âY-Your hair,â Miles managed to say through stifled laughter. âOne of the flowers fell into it.â
Phoenix hands shot up into his hair. âReally?â
âYou look so silly, Phoenix.â When Phoenix failed to find the flower, Miles reached out. âHere, let me.âÂ
 Phoenix remained still as Miles reached up to the top of his head and picked the flower out of his hair. âYour hairâs really soft,â Miles said quietly, before handing it over to Phoenix. âHere you go.â
because Miles apparently remembered that it was difficult for Phoenix to get the petals from his hair the first time, and also, wanted an excuse to touch Phoenixâs hair again.
But also the dialogue and interactions are ONCE AGAIN INSPIRED BY MIKA based on this reply to my reply to the art on twitter. look at that you can go and retweet the art on twitter too!
Overall this gives us an accurate Thoughts to Speech translator for Miles:
Miles: You have cherry blossom petals in your hair and it is going to kill me.
Phoenix: What? Do I?
Miles: No, wait, donât brush them out, I want to touch your hair because it is soft and this is the perfect excuse. You look so captivating.
if Miles had said that out loud though it would probably have killed both of them.
Phoenix let out an awkward, low laugh, starting somewhere deep within his chest. âR-Really.â
âMhm.â
Edgeworthâs eyes locked with Phoenixâs, and time seemed to freeze. There was a sudden thrum of tension in the air, as if Phoenix were in a play and heâd suddenly forgotten his lines, forgotten he was supposed to be in a play at all.
(chanting)Â âkiss kiss kiSS KISS KISS --â
But before either of them could break the sudden spell over them, a fishing hook whirred through the air, and â
âAck, I â I think I got it stuck!â
but of course that needs to be interrupted at the worst possible time because this is fanfiction and this is how things work!
âIn the tree?! How did you even manage to get it that far?â
âDonât worry about it, Maggey, I can climb up the tree and get it unstuck, just hang on ââ
âNo, no, if I just give it a big yankââ
âMaggeyâ!â
I broke the first rule of writing dialogue because I canât really remember whoâs supposed to be saying what. I think that Maya had a few lines here and then I didnât change them since there were no dialogue tags...
Pretty much -- Maggey with her eternal luck tried to fish but released the line too early as she was swinging back so the line went back and got caught in the tree branches directly above Phoenix and Miles.
I think the dialogue progression goes Maggey -> Originally Maya but now either Larry or Franziska -> Gumshoe -> Maggey -> everyone going MAGGEY NO!!!
I remember going fishing with my grandpa once a long time ago and either I or my brother did get the fishing line stuck in a tree. would not recommend.
The branch above Phoenix and Edgeworth jostled, and pink petals burst all around them, fluttering down and catching in their hair and on their clothes. One petal even fell behind Edgeworthâs glasses.
They stared at each other for a moment, stunned, Edgeworthâs hand still loosely wrapped around Phoenixâs wrist, as Maggey shouted apologies from the distance.
There are no cherry blossom trees where I live so I have no idea if weâre even in the right season for this or if cherry blossom trees even behave this way - but Iâm basing it off of... you know when itâs that point in fall where if you shake a tree branch leaves will just scatter everywhere? That.Â
Also RIP to the other four who were just having a grand old time fishing and then turn around seeing these two sitting really close to each other almost holding hands about two seconds away from a kiss... which theyâd just interrupted...
And then â the most incredible thing happened, and Edgeworth began to laugh.
Phoenix could have catalogued all the laughs he heard from Edgeworth: the usual, short laughs often mistaken for a scoff by those who didnât know him as well as Phoenix did; the triumphant, smug, courtroom laughs when he thought he had Phoenix cornered; to the quiet, restrained ones in private that were more of a hum than anything else. This laugh was new.
This was a full-on fit of laughter bubbling deep in his chest and spilling from his mouth, which Edgeworth quickly covered with his free hand, with the additional bonus of covering his reddening face. It wasnât something hidden or faked or triumphant, it was genuine, and open, and Phoenix could swear it was one of the most beautiful sounds he ever heard.
Miles here is going through an emotional rollercoaster having been two seconds away from finally kissing the love of his life only to be interrupted at the worst possible time, which is just so on brand for the two of them that he canât help but start laughing hysterically. Plus Phoenix probably looks absolutely shocked suddenly covered in petals, which doesnât help.
Then the next two paragraphs are brought on by Phoenix Pining and also me wanting Miles Edgeworth to laugh more...Â
From my notes for this scene:
They stare at each other for a moment and laugh, and Milesâ laugh just utterly captivates Phoenix and makes him fall so completely in love immediately and oh no he is screwed he is utterly screwed.
So pretty much I had to encapsulate the âfalling so completely in love immediatelyâ part which I decided to do by focusing on Miles laughing. I wanted to draw a lot of attention to that which is why there are so many paragraphs dedicated to Miles laughing and Phoenix thinking about Miles laughing.
Trucyâs laughter always made the world feel a little brighter, and made Phoenix feel stronger. Edgeworthâs laugh did the opposite; it dislodged something inside of him, it weakened him, it made the whole world go soft and fuzzy around him. Instead of illuminating all the good in the world, it turned Phoenixâs world into one person.
More focus on Milesâ laughter but also... kind of drawing attention to Phoenixâs reaction to this being different from his reaction to other people he cares about laughing? Because feeling warm and happy when seeing someone you care about non-romantically laugh is normal, but then I wanted to make it clear that this is a different sort of feeling for Phoenix.Â
Also Phoenix has to realize this is a different sort of feeling for him because otherwise he could brush it off like heâs probably dismissed all of his romantic feelings throughout the years as âoh Iâm just glad my friend is happy, and I rarely ever hear Edgeworth laugh so him being relaxed enough to laugh like that makes me feel happy too,â but itâs not what heâd expect if he just sees Miles as a friend. And itâs described as weakening in the paragraph because right now the subject of his romantic feelings for Miles isnât something that Phoenix can fully or easily accept right now (as chapter 5 would indicate).
Edgeworthâs fit of laughter subsided, and he shifted his hand so he could look at Phoenix again, the hints of a shy grin peeking out between his fingers, his hair and his shirt and his face adorned with a sweet, gentle pink. It was like looking at an entirely different person â or, no, the same person, but with all armor off, all guards lowered.
Miles is very embarrassed right now but kind of... in a good way...? Like again, almost kissed the love of his life then rudely interrupted at the last possible moment, plus Phoenixâs whole reaction to the thing gave Miles the impression that Phoenix wanted to kiss him as well, so heâs feeling a little giddy. Plus he was just laughing a lot when he normally doesnât do that. Overall heâs not used to expressing his emotions so heâs embarrassed and a little shy about it...
The part about Milesâ âhair and shirt and face adorned with a sweet, gentle pinkâ refers to both the cherry blossom petals (in his hair and clinging to his shirt and a bit on his face) and also him blushing quite a bit.
It all feels a little out of character honestly haha because Miles isnât really the type to be blushing hardcore like this and be a little shy, buuut in this case I let myself get away with it because heâs dealing with romantic feelings he hasnât ever dealt with at this level before, and itâs also out of character just enough to really strike Phoenix in the heart. You can just imagine him staring at Miles with the most lovestruck expression on his face because he hasnât seen this side of Miles before and he loves it.
Phoenixâs heart stuttered in his chest, and may have stopped entirely.
He was screwed.
He was completely and utterly screwed.
And even Phoenix canât deny that heâs super in love at this point.Â
I think I wrote this part, changed the words âscrewedâ to âdoomedâ right before posting, and then switched it back again for no particular reason. The Vibe just felt a little off but oh well.
Then the next chapter skips over the rest of this picnic but honestly Phoenixâs brain skipped over the rest of this picnic as well. Imagine the two of them just kind of standing around in a lovestruck daze for a while. I think Franziska had to physically drag Miles out of there. no one knows how Phoenix got home, not even Phoenix and least of all me!
But thank you Mika for requesting this!! And for drawing such incredible art for me to base the chapter around haha!!!
11 notes
¡
View notes