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AM Chapter 19

So happy that AM has detoured from the path VW/SS is following because that means I get to play a different map!

Possible spoilers for all routes up until ch 19 and SS ch 18 below.

Pre-Battle

So excited for this chapter - because two lords are actually going to work together. It's the first time and looking like the only time based on what's happened in other routes.

Hey, Claude, long time, no see.

Yeah, the Kingdom and Alliance Army teaming up! Why didn't this happen any sooner?

JUDITH! Cool to see her here.

Claude is so sure his city won't fall lamo. That's very Claude.

So are those "wounds" from Gondor why I won't get to use Claude AND Dimitri.

Claude believes in Dimitri (and Byleth) 😭

Ingrid's a Judith fangirl. My too, Ingrid.

Wow, Claude set himself up as bait to get the enemy inside all based on how much he trusted Dimitri and Byleth? That's more of a mastermind scheme than he's pulled in his own route.

Ok, guys, I'm seeing why there's a Claude/Dimitri crowd lamo.

OMG it's HILDA! And she'd defending Claude 😭😭😭 How quickly my heart switches from Dimitri/Claude to Hilda/Claude lol.

Battle

Arundel doesn't really add much to the sad state of elder men from the Empire, does he?

By "that idiot," does he mean Cornelia? He can't mean Fleche.

Claude calling us late while Dimitri is all serious. Yeah, I can see the appeal of shipping them together lol.

Dude, Hilda just crit the first (and second) dude who attacked her. What a champ.

If Hilda dies, does she die for good? I don't think I want to test that theory and will just blitz this map. Which is easy with the Blue Lions in part thanks to Dimitri just being absurd. They're also surprisingly critical happy. Not that I'm complaining.

You know, the last time I was here, I was invading and killing Claude and Hilda instead of defending them. This feels so much better.

Arundel's talking mad shit for a man who's army got decimated in like three turns (other than that little corner he's hiding in, but Dimitri's right there so).

Time for Dimitri vs Arundel dialogue.

I forgot that was his uncle. Poor guy can't catch a break (Dimitri, not Arundel, fuck Arundel).

Dimitri telling Arundel he's rather calm for someone in his position (FYI, all his soldiers are dead).

Why does Arundel want him and Edelgard to kill each other? He really didn't answer the question about what happened lol.

Man, this was way too short. The other routes took me like 10-15 rounds. This one got cleared in 5.

I protected Hilda and Judith! So they gave me presents. Feels good. Feels so good compared to slaughtering Judith while she tries to retreat and killing Hilda for protecting Claude.

Post-Battle

This is legit the only route so far were all three lords get to do something after the time skip except die.

It's nice seeing two lords just talk without wanting to kill each other. Makes me wish we got more of this. But, hey, at least it's Dimitri and Claude who got the chance too.

Claude calling Dimitri and Byleth soft-hearted. He's not wrong.

I bet Dimitri's so embarrassed right now, Claude saying he knew Dimitri would set his own goals aside to help Claude and Byleth just agreeing.

Claude really gambled on Dimitri lol.

Oh, we get Claude's weapon! That's pretty cool. He gave us a present. Edelgard didn't get one.

Why is the Alliance gone? Wait, they just decided to join Dimitri? Did Claude just dump the Alliance in Dimitri's lap?

😂😂😂😂😂 Poor Dimitri. All he ever wanted was to be a good king and revenge and now he's the leader of the Alliance too lamo.

I'm know it's not going to happen, but how banger if I now got to use Claude too.

Yeah, that's what I figured. Claude's leaving.

Oh, now we get to go rescue Rhea.

Yessss promise to meet again. Though I'm sure that's after the game is over. Still, feels good knowing Claude and Dimitri parted on such good terms. Seems like it's a good sign for the future. And the Alliance just willingly joined the Kingdom too.

Oh, God, Felix, never change. Demanding Dimitri tell the truth. Oh, about Edelgard being his step-sister. And Dimitri's telling them about it.

Ugh, how can he talk about his step-mother so calmly? Do we know if she caused Duscur? I really don't want her to have done that for Dimitri's sake, but given how he's this game's punching bag . . .

Glad Rodrigue knew about Patricia. That means Lambert really trusted Rodrigue.

Mercedes is always so compassionate. I love her so much.

Annette - "I feel the idea of fighting family is just about the worst thing ever." Also Annette, can get recruited to Crimson Flower (I'm betting she gets to fight Gilbert at least once, right?)

OMG Sylvain remembered that dagger 😂😂😂 I love how casual Dimitri and Sylvain are with each other in general. It's nice since he's got so many strained relationships, but with Sylvain it's always been pretty easy between those two.

I love how Felix is concerned that Dimitri can't bring himself to kill Edelgard. What a far cry from the guy who didn't think Dimitri deserved to walk on two legs.

Oh, great, another lord willing to work with Edelgard. $10 says she refuses to work with Dimitri too.

Ashe talking about killing family 😭

Wait, though, are we actually going to talk with Edelgard? Is this like . . . diplomacy? In my Fire Emblem? Just Dimitri things I guess.

It's a waste of breath though. Edelgard has no interest in working with Claude or Dimitri.

Edelgard really just takes Ls after she wins before the time skip.

Wait, what is Edelgard planning? "There is no other way," um except there is. You could just, not, take over Fodlan and kill everyone who won't let you stomp all over them.

You know what? I noticed something. Edelgard lied to all the Black Eagles (sans Hubert) about that attack from the evil death cult group (I refuse to call them "those who slither in the dark"). Claude got pressured to come clean about his origins to the Golden Deer, but didn't tell them. He didn't lie, but he didn't tell them about him. Dimitri, though, opened right up to the Blue Lions about him and Edelgard. It's funny that all three get scenes like this, where there's pressure on the lord to reveal something and Edelgard lies, Claude withholds, and Dimitri tells everyone the truth. Blue Lions really feel like a family.

New Chapter

This one is still different from VW and SS now.

We get a different picture too!

So now we go kill the Death Knight - again - Mercedes is gonna be big sad though. Maybe I'll tea time her to try and cheer her up.

So everyone is uniting under Dimitri now. Let's go.

So the next chapter is this fort with the Death Knight there?

Poor Mercie is sad though. I don't like her being sad.

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8/12 Chat Recap

Only a week late, but here's the recap from last week's chat! Since it was a lot of positive commentary rather than suggestions, I've mostly copied and pasted the comments themselves, albeit with removing the names attached. So know that people really liked it :)

Question for the hivemind:

Intro:  we should probably make a standard for how we do the intro - both who it is, and WHAT it is (though obviously episodes will have variations). Thoughts?

General Comments: each and every single episode I read so far I was like OMG THIS IS MY FAVORITE EPISODE, and then i read the next one and was like NO WAIT THIS IS THE BEST ONE EVER and so on I want to give a shoutout to Stephanie Fisher for playing test audience! does anyone know who she is on tumblr? I want to, like, send her hugs; it's so nice to see someone who doesn't know what's going on comment everything is wonderful? *raises hand to say exactly that* i think overall there's less tweaking than I thought and also i'm super happy with the concrit i got one thing I'd like to say is that the style is largely consistent, except for a couple outliers each episode is legit good fanfic AND good TV i'm loving everything. it's not just better than the show, it's all really great on its own And I think we've managed to get consistent characterizations as a maybe off topic note, I'm super happy with the commenting because I actually felt super awkward about my episode, but having people comment how awesome it was helped so much with self esteem I'm super happy with the commenting because I actually felt super awkward about my episode, but having people comment how awesome it was helped so much like, people are so good at spotting things that don't make sense or that aren't consistent it was actually the first time i wasn't disheartened by getting crit, since it was actually really useful and pointed out valid stuff (btw I want official statistics of how many beers Mick drinks and how many people he headbutts) we have SO MANY awesome women btw are we sending the showrunners a link or sth? to show what you can do when you really care about the show and the fans? when we're done? I'm all for it

just something I forgot to mention earlier re: Stein and his perspective on changing time - he goes from ep 1 where he wants to change it for personal reasons and goes to this point where he's the opposite (which is the perspective I followed in ep7); I would blame that on episode 2, i.e. episode 1: let's change things, episode 2: I changed things, things went wrong, after that, he's all "we can't change things, look at how bad I screwed it up", as an echo to Sara's arc If we do a season 3 rewrite wishlist: go back to visit Ching and the Chinese pirates, a Nate cameo, Austria episode, French Rev episode, Israel episode

Episode 1: Nate is wonderful; he's a history nerd, he's well-meaning, he interacts well with the rest of the team; omg he hasn't met Len yet! like, if we weren't bringing in so many guest stars, we could have had him stay for the entire season and I wouldn't have a problem with it about ep1, did we ever resolve the issue of the nazis having the knowledge and the material to blow up NY? It was provided by Eobard. Is there anything stopping him from giving them more? The fact that he's a speedster with the attention span of a gerbil? yeah, I think the key thing is that he left no more Eobard, no more disruptions

Episode 2: before anything else, BAMBI WAS AMAZING. <3 BAMBI.  I think we all love Bambi. can we keep her on the Waverider next season? team mascot! i really thought those Ray scenes were so good. btw, I noticed over the course of the episodes that we have a really fantastic Ray arc going on, starting here. His emotional isolation and struggles with identity are just spot-on every episode. Like, I'm remembering why I actually liked Ray in season 1. Seeing Ray (rich white Christian privileged tech guy) have to deal with basically Mick's storyline is so much more emotionally satisfying.  It doesn't feel like punching down, you know? yes, Ray's isolated, but it's not because the other Legends are dicks. it's because he went through trauma and identity isuses What did people think of the Crusades arc in episode 2? So far so good :D I like the argument about faith vs logic

Episode 3: The JSA is awesome! god, yes. They have so much more character! I love Amaya and Rex' relationship. I was just about to say I actually ship it this time re Ray: him having pulled up pictures of the Bamibiraptor species because he misses Bambi? MY HEART GOD YES and THAT FIRST GLIMPSE OF LEN that was such a cool moment with Nate XD Nate and his grandfather was a fantastic moment.The Nate and his grandfather scene was ON POINT and also Nate's hemophilia was handled so much better too. like, I REALLY liked Nate by the time we were done with him Amaya was done really well, I think. it's kind of funny; we all, working mostly separately, gave Amaya a more coherent personality than the actual show did Amaya and Sara are awesome together too! Amaya and Sara had a real honest budding friendship everything made /sense/ and you even threw in a historical woman for us For a possible title: Heirlooms? Stein is on team "don't change things" in ep3 because of the consequences in ep2. Connection can be made clearer.

Episode 4: YOU MADE ME CRY. gooood title. very good title indeed! I thought maybe Sara was a bit very trusting of Eo in the bar scene, even though she knew there was an evil time traveler out there, but maybe she was a bit drunk? yeah, drunk and depressed was what I was going for

Episode 5: VIKINGS! YESSS! I LOVE IT SO MUCH all the viking myths being undercut, with Ray as the audience proxy! it worked so well! I knew from the moment Ray gave Mick the horned helmet Mick would headbutt someone with it XD I was so looking forward to it I really liked the Jax-Gunlod relationship in ep 5 – same - yeah, that felt really natural to me. JAX IS SO DAMN GOOD. they? actually seemed to like each other? Jax and Gunlod were so sweet - if we can revisit her too I would be delighed! also I CRIED THIS EPISODE TOO, the bonfire scene :) it was so well done; it was the send-off to Len we all deserved the singing magic was awesome oooooh, and Jax using the football terms!!! and Mick finding viking friends :D And Lisa! (Forever in the Lisa Snart fandom over here...) YES LISA IS SO AWESOME

Episode 6: speaking of awesome Lisa I thought the heist was basically perfect one comment, kickingshoes drew Dr Metcalf as a woman, but in the episode they seem to be a man LEN *heart breaks* that scene where Mick and Len are talking, and Mick is like he should've known he'd see Len since that's where Len belongs..............;_; the "it's where he belongs" scene was PERFECT That was the only crit I had, really - he shouldn't say he's alive so soon I loved the worldbuilding so much I also really liked the Sara-Amaya relationship, Yeah, I know we agreed to keep things ship-neutral for the most part, but I think if people are into Sara/Amaya they are going to be REALLY happy with this rewrite. XD also, it felt properly cyberpunk?? VERY AWESOME one last thing @ ep6: LOVE THE TITLE

Episode 7: my personal little wish is that maybe we could have a line of dialogue in episoed 7 where Amaya tells the Nerd Squad about time travel side effects and maybe mentions what happened to her? I liked that you added in the other supergirl folks, and you made mention of the green lanterns and Alex and Mick getting along! that was all so fun!! XD I think there's a few points that could use some more dialogue like, where it just says Felicity says X and Cisco feels Y i want to SEE those scenes I loved the Green Lantern nods! And I agree, putting into more of a script format would be good I think. oh, I loved Barry's "NOT AN URBAN LEGEND!" yelp for the dominators, their motivations kept changing! I think just stick to the first "they're evil expanders" yeah, keep it simple "Now we’ve got aliens, and time ships, and – uh, whatever you deal with, Oliver –” “Ninjas,” says Oliver, wearily. NEEDS TO BE ON A TSHIRT

Episode 8: I love Constantine And Zed!! ? I feel like once it'll be more fleshed out, it'll be easier to comment I did like Queen B's intro. I was really excited by the, kind of, cinematic image I got during the Queen B scene? Like, I think she has such a Look and is so powerful that we can really make her intro visually gorgeous, since this is supposed to be a visual medium