#The villain's dialogue was very flippant and silly and childish but then they would stab someone through the head on the next page.
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#writing#writing advice#polls#I'll go first:#I was reading a book and the prose and dialogue were tonally dissonant.#The villain's dialogue was very flippant and silly and childish but then they would stab someone through the head on the next page.#And then we'd go between silly antics and then someone being decapitated or ripped in half with decent detail.#The subject of the story and the tone of the prose did not match#and it took me right out of the story.#On top of this the pacing was very unsatisfactory. Through the whole book there were only two settings.#We escape setting 1 about halfway through the book. Then we IMMEDIATELY get stuck in setting 2 for most of the rest.#Wait no there was a third but it barely has a presence.#If I were to change it I would adjust the prose to match the tone or adjust the subject matter to match the prose#Either make the subject matter sillier or make the prose more serious and grounded#It took me out of it so hard that I refused to read another book in the series
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